I haven’t linked up with any writing prompts lately, but this week’s suggestions worked perfectly with my WIP. While I had an infinite amount of passages relating to location and wild, finding one only 250 words long was a killer. I settled for this one. The following excerpt is from The Last Resort. Be kind.
We started down a rockier path. Our pace slowed, our hands traced along the mossy ravine wall for balance. The air cooled and grew saturated with water, the pregnant molecules bursting upon impact with my sweaty skin. The patter of rain falling, heavy and fast, echoed through the valley.
“Sounds like we’re going to get wet,” I said.
“I fully plan on it,” Rye answered.
The roar of water grew louder, as if the clouds had ripped open, allowing all the rain to pour out in one great deluge. Forget wet; we were going to get drenched. I stopped to zip my camera inside a plastic bag.
“If I were you, I’d keep the camera out.” Rye grinned like a pirate, his eyes wild and daring. “Come on. The picnic area is just around that bend.”
My legs brushed against damp, drooping fronds. Scarlet blossoms stood erect with perfect drops of water dangling from their petal’s supple tongues. The rainforest’s dense canopy opened up, allowing the sun to stream down and illuminate the foliage, turning the leaves near fluorescent shades of green. The air smelled alive and slightly electric, as if charged ions still lingered after a wicked thunderstorm.
We turned the corner. A cascade of white water crashed down a mossy cliff into a resplendent blue lagoon. The water shimmered in the sunlight, a pool of undulating aquamarine gemstones, with waves gently lapping along the rocky banks.
Rye’s warm hands grasped my bare shoulders. “I told you it would be worth the wait.”
Trifecta’s one-word prompt. This week, they gave us:
1 a : living in a state of nature and not ordinarily tame or domesticatedb (1) : growing or produced without human aid or care (2) : related to or resembling a corresponding cultivated or domesticated organism
2 a : not inhabited or cultivatedb : not amenable to human habitation or cultivation
The Write on Edge prompt for this week is to use setting to deepen the development of your story. You can use it to give insight into a character or a conflict or simply to evoke an emotional mood from your reader. 250 words or less.
Beautiful visuals in this piece — it all feels very present. Would that I had a chance to visit their picnic spot!
I loved that! For a moment, I felt like I was on vacation or something. Beautiful words!
Great imagery! I enjoyed the lushness of the scene. Well done! 🙂
I loved this. I loved the supple tongues and the grin like a pirate. Blossoms standing erect and charged ions–there's a lot to love here. Thanks for linking up. I'm really hoping we see a lot more of you at Trifecta. New prompt on Fridays and Mondays.
Beautiful. You had me wanting to go there. This line I particularly enjoyed, "The air smelled alive and slightly electric" Nice take on the prompt.
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I want to go there! Beautiful. I absolutely love the imagery.
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Love this line: The air cooled and grew saturated with water, the pregnant molecules bursting upon impact with my sweaty skin.
Gorgeous.
So descriptive, I felt like I was in the rain forest and could almost feel the humidity. Thank you!
Wow, well done! very vivid images and descriptions. I felt right at home reading this 🙂
I'll be sure to check them out!
I hope that humidity didn't make your hair frizz up. Thanks for reading.
The imagery as you describe makes me want to visit this setting. Felt peaceful to me.
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Nice imagery! And I'm glad to find your blog through WoE. Your description–writer. wino. soccer mom. smarty-pants–fits me as well. 😉
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Oh, that put a beautiful image in my head. Made me want to go to that spot and get wet – even if the spot isn't real and I hate getting my clothing wet. lol
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Shhh…that spot IS real. And top secret. And I WILL return.
I think you did a great job! And I'm a sucker for the word "resplendent." Anything with that in it makes me go "AWESOME!" 🙂
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What an amazing scene you've painted here. I can close my eyes and see/feel/hear it beautifully. The descriptions are so rich and vivid. The only suggestion I have is when you mention the mossy cliff the second time, it could be an opportunity to change it up and continue to capture the reader's mind. But, as is, it is an incredible piece. Excellent job!
Ooh, good catch. That's why I totally need beta readers. So many things I should catch that slide right by. Thanks for reading!
Well then, welcome fellow writer, wino, soccer mom, and smarty-pants!